LATIHAN 1
Revise the following sentences to reduce wordiness.
Revisilah kalimat berikut agar menjadi konstruksi yang hemat.
- Her face was oval in shape.
- It will be difficult to obtain the true facts of the matter.
- The painting, which is hanging next to the door, is more priceless than the vase that sits next to it.
- Because of the fact that I was in the shower, I didn't hear the telephone when it rang.
- We knocked on the door, but there was no one at home.
- A statement of the position of the President was given by his press secretary.
- Painters should have several dropcloths to use when they are painting in a room that is full of furniture.
- Our consensus of opinion on the basic fundamentals mate the meeting shorter than is usually the case.
- The report on their progress will be delivered by the leader of the task force, and then during a later period we will collaborate together on the recommendations we want to recommend.
- Let me refer you back to the night of January 23 when at seven o'clock in the evening you saw a truck which was blue in color leaving the warehouse.
Avoid wordiness by choosing economical constructions to express ideas clearly and concisely and by eliminating all unnecessary words.
Hindari kelebihan kata dengan memilih konstruksi hemat untuk mengungkapkan gagasan secara jelas dan tepat dan dengan menyingkirkan semua kata yang tidak perlu.
WORDY There are several causes of malnutrition, one of which is vitamin deficiency.
CONCISE Vitamin deficiency is one cause of malnutrition.
WORDY I think that Being There is Peter Seller's best movie, superior to all others.
CONCISE I think that Being There is Peter Seller's best movie.
WORDY Regarding the subject of laws governing motorists, many people feel that the speed limit should be increased to sixty-five miles per hour.
CONCISE Many people feel that the speed limit should be increased to sixty-five miles per hour.
WORDY The novel was neither interesting nor was it well written.
CONCISE The novel was neither interesting nor well written.
WORDY The famous singing group, "The Rolling Stones," is known internationally throughout the world.
CONCISE "The Rolling Stones" is an internationally known singing group.
WORDY The reason why he left New York two days early was that he had to attend a conference in Miami.
CONCISE He left New York two days early to attend a conference in Miami.
WORDY There are various and sundry reasons why one should avoid discussing religion.
CONCISE There are various reasons why one should avoid discussing religion.
WORDY The bridge stretched across the vast swampland, and the bridge was twenty-five miles long.
CONCISE The twenty-five-mile-long bridge stretched across the vast swampland.
WORDY It was clearly evident that the grass had been cut.
CONCISE It was evident (or it was clear) that the grass had been cut.
WORDY She is a tennis player who plays tennis regularly.
CONCISE She plays tennis regularly.
WORDY I picked up the heavy tools with my two hands.
CONCISE I picked up the heavy tools with my hands.
WORDY Sir Thomas More was a writer who wrote Utopia.
CONCISE Sir Thomas More wrote Utopia.
WORDY There is a society called the Audubon Society, which was named in honor of John Audubon, the great artist.
CONCISE The Audubon Society was named in honor of John Audubon, the great artist.
LATIHAN 1
Kunci Jawaban
- Her face was oval.
- It will be difficult to obtain the facts.
- The painting hanging next to the door is more valuable than the vase next to it.
- Because I was in the shower, I didn't hear the telephone ring.
- We knocked on the door, but no one was home.
- His press secretary stated the President's position.
- Painters need several dropcloths when painting a room full of furniture.
- Our consensus of the fundamentals made the meeting shorter than usual.
- The progress report will be delivered the leader of the task force, and later will be collaborate on our recommendations.
- Remember the night of January 23 when you saw a blue truck leaving the warehouse at seven o'clock.
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